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Post by Duddahs on Mar 4, 2011 11:17:15 GMT -6
The Gargoyles on top of the North Tower stood ever vigilant for danger from the outside. Little did they know… Zucchini Napkin Barometer Suppurating Deodorant Rallem, I see you have added another great prompt... But any suggestions or input to the discussion about this thread from what we have been discussing of late? |
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Post by Duddahs on Mar 4, 2011 11:46:27 GMT -6
The Gargoyles on top of the North Tower stood ever vigilant for danger from the outside. Little did they know… on the Seventh Floor hallway, danger itself was running rampant.
Argus Filch had just had one of his happiest and productive meetings with the new head of Hogwarts. Delores Umbrige was spreading her hatred everywhere and Filch could not be happier. As a matter of fact, he had been given permission to punish and abuse the students in ways that had never been allowed to occur under the direction of Albus Dumbledore.
“You there, yah filthy elf, get me a ZUCCINI and Butter sandwich for mah dinna, an make it snappy. I'm on official watch tonight and I won have time ter leave mah post.”
The house elf scurried out of Filch’s Office as quickly as it could. Good thing as a swift kick into the air had barely missed striking it from behind.
With a loud “POP” the small house elf had promptly returned with a small paper bag in one hand and a rolled up NAPKIN in the other. It stretched out its arms and dropped its head to gaze at the floor. It was bad enough that the poor house elves had to clean even Argus Filch’s Office which by the way happened to smell as if the Old Man had never heard of DEODERANT but that they also had to do his bidding now as well.
Proclamations had been popping up nearly hourly these days and the house elves were not spared the wrath of Delores Umbridges iron fisted rule over the castle and its occupants’.
Filch turned toward the loud POP and just sneered at the little creature before him….
“Took yah long enough didn yah? Gonna have a little chat with the new Head and see what we can do bout you lazy creatures. Yah’ll see, trouble, that is what you’re gonna be in, real trouble.”
With that another loud “POP” and the house elf was gone.
Filch headed out of his office and slowly made his way through the corridors and stairways of the castle.
“POP, smart they think theyz are, just poppin in an out juz ta rub it in my face thayz is… Don think I don know what is going on either. I’ll halves the last laugh, I will, juz they waitin seez.” Filch spoke out with venom to no one in particular.
Filch’s footsteps echoing throughout the halls until he had found his destination. A chair facing a blank wall in the center of the seventh floor hallway was all he needed as he settled in for an evening’s wait. For those rule breakers.
Filch promptly reached into his elf prepared bagged food and stuffed half the sandwich into his greedy mouth.
In a moment of his body pressure began to rise as if a BAROMETER. His stomach began to churn, his head ache and his skin to boil at the touch. SUPPURATING pustules breaking out all over his body, hands and face, spreading pain like wildfire everywhere!
“ARGH! Yah rotten elf! I’ll getcha if its the lass thing ah do!”
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Post by grandpalovegood on Mar 4, 2011 15:40:20 GMT -6
Yep.... this one has already had me looking up words in the dictionary.... pus? ew.. I guess we will be having some really intersting entries for this story. ;D
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Post by rallem on Mar 4, 2011 17:59:10 GMT -6
As far as judging goes, I am easy. If people don't want to judge then we won't judge.
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Post by Duddahs on Mar 5, 2011 16:37:00 GMT -6
As far as judging goes, I am easy. If people don't want to judge then we won't judge. Thanks Rallem, That is really very kind of you. Now I do not wish for anyone to be modest or afraid to rip my story apart. Actually, I need the direction to become a better writer, not that I actually consider myself a writer... How presumptuous of me! Shame on me Duddahs, Shame! |
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Post by grandpalovegood on Mar 7, 2011 7:42:16 GMT -6
Yeah... thanks about that... Yes really it's me who's being a stinkerabout this issue. OH and Rallem... do you have a due date for when you want the entries in by? Right now, I will be out for a bit... then as soon as I get back home in a couple of hours my mind will be mush to be creative enough to write... still I can try even if you are calling for something in by tonight. Sometimes even when I do write when I'm asleep things turn out better than when I was awake... I just don't want to take that chance that it will not sound properly. got to go for now...  hope you are feeling better. |
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Post by grandpalovegood on Mar 8, 2011 9:29:36 GMT -6
OK.... I guess since no one has been in lately to do up the talley... I am still getting in under the deadline... Off I go to see what I can come up with. Tootles! I do hope Erin is feeling much better soon.  |
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Post by grandpalovegood on Mar 10, 2011 6:40:38 GMT -6
Just dropped in to say sorry for the wait. For the time being, I'm putting my new laptop to the side. It's driving me crazy. Also, I was lucky that my company for the morning cancelled, meaning my morning is nearly free for my writing. So, please don't give up on me. I've got thoughts in my head I HAVE to get out... So look for something to be posted from me probably by late morning. Thanks for the patience.  |
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Post by grandpalovegood on Mar 10, 2011 10:13:49 GMT -6
The Gargoyles on top of the North Tower stood ever vigilant for danger from the outside. Little did they know… Zucchini Napkin Barometer Suppurating The Gargoyles on top of the North Tower stood ever vigilant for danger from the outside. Little did they know all was well. The grounds looked ever so dark while the omniscient clouds were rushing in. Slow but steady was a cold wind. It caused a chill to run through the glassless windows of the castle halls. Below, they could see there was a disturbance within the Forbidden Forest, for there was one spot where the trees would shake. Suddenly, a thestral or two would dart up then quickly back down within the treetops. Obviously they were feeding on something below the surface. The Gargoyles turned their watchful gaze over near the forest's edge where Hagrid's hut stood. He was seen harvesting an armful of exceptionally large ZUCCHINI from his garden. The wind blew ever so strongly to the point that it caused Trelawney's windows to burst open all of the sudden. "Oh dear," she said as she pulled her shawl around her more tightly. The tall, thin teacher with a frizzy sort of hairstlye hurried over to close the shudders and fasten them with the latch. The noise outside was shut out in the distance. It was imperative that she have silence to better hear the spirits whisper things to her. In the middle of the room is a round table. Trelawney makes her way over to retake her seat. At the center of the table sits a crystal ball. She removes a silk handkerchief which was covering the item. As she gazes deep within the ball, her thick glasses cause her eyes to look ever so insect-like. Finally, in disappointment, she leans back in her chair. "Oooo. Nothing." She balls her fists tightly, while holding onto the corners of the shawl she is wearing. Finally, her eye catches the stacked teacups located across the room. Taking out her wand she summons one. "Accio teacup!" It flies across the room toward her and gently lands upon the table in front of her. "Tea. I need tea." Reaching into her pocket, she pulls out a sachet filled with tea leaves, her favorite flavor. "In you go," she said as she empties the tea leaves into the cup. Finally, she makes her way to the kettle upon the fire that had been heating water for her upcoming class. Returning once again, she pours the hot water a bit too hastily into the teacup. This causes some to spill out upon the table. She uses a NAPKIN to clean up the mess. Once it cools she looks at the dregs, anxiously to see the pattern that emerges. Nothing is to be seen. In frustration, she sits back hard in her chair, looking around. Suddenly, a distant voice is heard. Her eyes finally land once again upon the crystal ball at the center of the table. There she sees it! Students. But what students? Hmm? She moves in to get a closer look. She notices the Gryffindor colors... The Gryffindor common room. "Yes!" she says with excitement. The scene unfolds before her... First year students all sitting there, some chewing, some have turned green. Some of them are throwing up into a cauldron, while others were covered in SUPPURATING boils across their faces. What is she to make of this? The bell chimes. It's time for class to start. She makes her way over to the center of the room and opens up the trapdoor within the floor. "Come in students," she says in greetings. She waves her arms around, gesturing them to take a seat at the little tables within the room. "Welcome. Welcome," she said with a strange airy sound in her voice. The wind still howling outside. As the class begins to take their seats, she wanders over toward the window she had closed earlier. She tapped the BAROMETER that was hanging nearby, checking it's measurements. Yep, at least there is a storm coming, she thinks to herself. Something to predict for the class. "Hey Harry," Ron said as they entered the room. "Did you see those candies Fred and George tested out on the first years last night?" He cracked up for a second, until he noticed Hermione's gaze was not a happy one. He cleared his throat, then plopped his books down upon the floor next to his seat. ========= 2:01 pm... my time Miss Charlotte (I tinkered around a bit more then edited/changed some mistakes etc. )  |
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Post by grandpalovegood on Mar 10, 2011 14:09:55 GMT -6
OK I finally read yours Duddah.... I really like how you filled in the blanks to what we saw in the movie... Remember when he showed up at Deloris' office looking like that? LOL!
Another thing I really like is how you made his accent easy to see/read. For me, trying to read netspeak is hard to do... then as I mentioned before, reading for Hagrid is often hard for me to do as well. But, you really made Filch's accent come through. I'm not even sure if JKR did that but your story really brings to mind how the actor in the film really sounds when he plays the part... and that he does well.
Good going.
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Hey Rallem... are YOU going to make an entry now too? I wonder if Erin will since she told us she's really busy. Maybe she can still post hers at a later time whenever she really has time to do one. I enjoy reading hers as well as the both of you.
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Post by Duddahs on Mar 14, 2011 11:26:46 GMT -6
Too Quiet in here for too long......
Duddahs wipes some of the dust off the parchments that are left for everyone to read. Relights the fireplace and sets out some fresh Pumpkin Juice and Chocolate Chip Cookies.
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Post by Duddahs on Mar 23, 2011 11:48:09 GMT -6
Well, since no one has posted any new stories in a good week now, I am going to just throw out my thoughts regarding Miss Charlottes story.
I really enjoyed the story and the seamless way that you introduced the required words into the story. It was a fun and easy read.
It seems that some of us, including myself have learned a bit about how to write as I find that for me personally, I found that Rallem has a direct way of writing without much to get in ones way and thus keeping the readers attention. Miss Charlotte, your most recent writings seem to be doing this as well.
What I look forward to in Erin's stories are the way that she uses her characters to move from one part of the story to the next. She seems to be able to cover time very well in her posts and that is something I am working on in mine as well.
So, hopefully we can get a new prompt from someone, anyone that is and we can get back to writing the Harry Potter Stories... No matter who is on or not.. All are welcome and everyone is appreciated so come on folks, get those keyboards burning up.....
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Post by grandpalovegood on Mar 24, 2011 1:01:11 GMT -6
I'm not sure.... Is it MY turn to write the next prompt? I think it might be. I know I was waiting to see if Erin or Rallem would write something first...
Anyhow.. I do wonder if Rallem is alright. He seems to be peeking in every now and then but never commented on my last comment to him. I know it's allergy season and along with that comes terrible headaches for me... hopefully he's not experiencing those. I'll give it another day or so before I do my prompt, now that things are getting back to normal for the most of us.
Now if people are staying away because the rules were changed then I see no problem with going back to the original ways of doing things... meaning Rallem is up to choose a winner right?
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Post by rin68nyr on Mar 24, 2011 15:45:58 GMT -6
LOL I will hopefully get back to some writing, soon! We are busy with doing some spring cleaning around here...and it's just not fair for me to sit here writing, while my husband is hard at work...so I'll get to it when I can!
If we go back to the judging, that's fine. If not, and we are going to critique each others' work, so you guys want me to correct spelling/grammar? I'm a bit of a stickler for those things, but ignored them for the purpose of a good story.
Erin
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Post by Duddahs on Mar 24, 2011 16:41:03 GMT -6
I agree, we can always go back to the writing comp no problem. It was just a suggestion to try and get others to come and write more here not to get someone to leave. If that is the reason that we seem to have lost a posting member, that is just not what was the intention. Exact opposite actually.
Erin, which ever way it goes on being, I do not mind being corrected for spelling and punctuation.. They are the bane of my existence to begin with.
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Post by grandpalovegood on Mar 26, 2011 8:26:30 GMT -6
Well, I guess we are all in agreement. SO all we need is for Rallem to come choose who goes next. ![]() i48.TP .com/i1gtw9.gif[/img] |
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Post by Duddahs on Mar 31, 2011 12:32:59 GMT -6
Well, does anyone wish to continue this thread at all? If not, then just let some of us know.
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Post by rin68nyr on Mar 31, 2011 14:17:47 GMT -6
I would like to. Perhaps we could allow 2 weeks for deadlines before we give our responses? Or are we going back to judging? Either way, I'm good. Should we just go ahead and set out a new one?
Erin
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Post by grandpalovegood on Mar 31, 2011 15:29:30 GMT -6
Well.... I just got word.. Rallem is out. Be assured that it has NOTHING to do with this thread... just other things and I do understand his reasoning... So, I don't expect him to even peek in to set who the next person is to be from where he left it. So it looks like since the only two people who entered last time was Duddah and myself... Duddah.. TAG you are it.  Then I'll be sort of... well... *slumps shoulders and sighs* I guess the short story thread, which I started a while back, is where I felt more comfortable this whole time. I mean, there is no deadline.. you may write when or how you like. Sometimes a thought would strike me out of the blue, and I would go with it... Then it might not strike me again for another month or two. It's more open and free. Then there is the fact that my life simply won't settle down. Just when I think things are going to be calm again it gets turned upside down again. I planned SO HAPPILY planned to sit down here to write my part of IG yesterday. I WAS well rested both physically and mentally. I had the entire morning to myself.. then another crisis struck and I"m exhausted. As for anyone here... family MUST come first. Looks like I won't have another time to even rest until mid next week, and that would most likely be to attempt to rest and nothing more. I guess a thread where I would be on a time restriction might be a bit hard for even ME to be able to participate in... That would not be fair to either of you. So, you guys really should not have to be in limbo just because of me. I would so like to see someone else drop by and be a third person so to make this thread work the way it was set up to be. It's going to be hard just the two of you.. but still good luck. I do see that it CAN work by simply taking turns, I guess. Giving tips back and forth to help each other out sounds really good that even to the spectator who MIGHT peek in.... I might can learn as I see your comments to each other. SOunds good to me.  I still say... lets keep this thread going. |
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Post by rin68nyr on Mar 31, 2011 18:06:22 GMT -6
Me too. We could just take turns writing story starters, and then whoever, whenever can write a story...even if it's using a previous story starter. Do we want to stick with the use of the 5 words....and the 500 word limit? I find that the 500 word limit, though hard, does make you cut out unnecessary wording...which is a good thing. I don't love having to stick in the 5 words...often I find it's just done arbitrarily, and doesn't always add to the story.
Erin
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I still say... lets keep this thread going.